Essay draft feedback session

The feedback I got for my essay was as good as it could have been considering that the essay is still unfinished, without a conclusion and no bibliography. After the group tutorials I feel confident with moving forward with the final development for my written submission.

PLAN OF ACTION:
- turn the preliminary title into a real, focused question
- Tie together the good, but currently disjointed points that compromise the latter half of the essay, into cohesive paragraphs.
- Add the images
- Arrive at a conclusion (this should follow naturally after reshaping the question)

Although I've still good a fair bit to do, Richard was positive about the way what I have of the essay was written, and suggested that with a little revision and finishing up it has the potential to be a really strong piece of work. Feeling (kind of confident).

Richard also suggested that I read this - it sounds as it it could be exactly the kind of text I need

Cop2 lecture notes: desire

I found this lecture extremely interesting. Obviously I'm getting waaaay ahead of myself, but I've already been musing on ideas for CoP3, and have been thinking about the representation of sex as either sin or salvation. Can't be giving it too much thought just yet, but if I do pursue it I will have to look at lot at theories of desire and the reprisal of desire.