Essay draft feedback session

The feedback I got for my essay was as good as it could have been considering that the essay is still unfinished, without a conclusion and no bibliography. After the group tutorials I feel confident with moving forward with the final development for my written submission.

PLAN OF ACTION:
- turn the preliminary title into a real, focused question
- Tie together the good, but currently disjointed points that compromise the latter half of the essay, into cohesive paragraphs.
- Add the images
- Arrive at a conclusion (this should follow naturally after reshaping the question)

Although I've still good a fair bit to do, Richard was positive about the way what I have of the essay was written, and suggested that with a little revision and finishing up it has the potential to be a really strong piece of work. Feeling (kind of confident).

Richard also suggested that I read this - it sounds as it it could be exactly the kind of text I need